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March 27, 2009
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:iconheliumgirl77:
I've been working on this for a while, well, more than a while actually as the idea came years ago. The hardest part was developing all the realism angles (though I know its silly to talk about realism in this genre, really!), as I wanted to work within the constraints of the originally story...

Still, the underlying conceit is straightforward and fun, and concerns my absolutely fave-est drink of all time. Even if I've plagarised horribly. If you've come this far I think you know what I mean;

"Oh, those are fabulous!" cried Mr. Wonka. "They fill you with bubbles, and the bubbles are full of a special kind of gas, and this gas is so terrifically lifting that it lifts you right off the ground just like a balloon, and up you go until your head hits the ceiling and there you stay."

"But how do you come down again?" asked little Charlie.

"You do a burp, of course," said Mr Wonka. "You do a great big long rude burp, and up comes the gas and down comes you!......But don't drink it outdoors! There's no knowing how high up you'll be carried if you do that."


I'd like to think our heroine(?) here learns an important lesson;
Don't steal fizzy lifting drinks!

And that she has fun whilst learning it :D Helpful, cheerful and critical comments happily received!

PS. Slight edits now in place from original version to give a better "liftoff".
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~LoquaciousJango 1 day ago
I do love exploring the long term effects of transformations, and a short epilogue is a great way to do that. A little too much purple prose, but it sort of makes sense, considering she's an art student.

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Mankind's reach does not escape his grasp, it exceeds his nerve.
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~racutio Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice story. It's nice to have such a brilliant literature writer on dA. And a detailed inflation writer at that. I've now read two of your stories and the detail has me hooked almost instantly. Very good story. Enjoyed every bit.

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Racutio: Anyone seen my metal toothpick? I left it in my den.

Flaris: *lights a new cigar and puffs it* I think I saw Glacier with it.

Racutio: ...Why?

Flaris: She worships you...

Racutio: ...Right...
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~heliumgirl77 Jul 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed them! I do try to do literature first, and let the inflation flow from that. :-D
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~racutio Jul 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Understandable. It allows readers to get a feel for the characters and the main plotline that comes afterwards. I do it all the time infact. :)

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Racutio: Anyone seen my metal toothpick? I left it in my den.

Flaris: *lights a new cigar and puffs it* I think I saw Glacier with it.

Racutio: ...Why?

Flaris: She worships you...

Racutio: ...Right...
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~Safaristeve29 Jun 12, 2011
One of the best Wonka-fiction stories I have ever read! Keep up the great work!
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~heliumgirl77 Jun 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Did I ever mention the W-word? ;)

Thanks ! This was a fun one to write....I kept thinking I was giving too much away at each stage, but it worked out.
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~perdi1309 Apr 3, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Again, I love it!

So happy I watch you :D

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I'm here because Laura Torch died. (If you get it, have a cookie).

My Knitting Blog: [link]
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~heliumgirl77 Aug 21, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
*Is happy about it too* :D
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~perdi1309 Aug 22, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
:D

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Serial Knitter.

I'm here because Laura Torch died. (If you get it, have a cookie).

My Knitting Blog: [link]
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~darth-clone19 Mar 31, 2009
This story was excellent. I loved the teasing, where you put references to inflation even before she found the drink.

The description was flawless. I could feel like she did. Really awesome. There's always a hint of ballooning existentialism when you talk about floating away. I love it :)

The ice cube on a summer day image was great. Then again, all the images here are great.
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